jasmineong wrote:do you have any other examples of composition startings to share?
There are a few more composition startings that can be used:
1) Description of weather or place
Eg (1)- weather (relating to hearing a scream) :
-(a) The heat from the hot sun weighed me down as I trudged
home after school. Perspiration made my uniform stick like glue to
my back. I just could not wait to get out of the heat.
As I laboured on, suddenly, I heard a faint cry coming from a
nearby void deck. Too tired to do anything about it, I decided
to continue walking.
"Help me!" I could hear the cry again. This time, it sounded more
urgent. Despite the heat, I began to run towards the void deck.
- (b) As I walked home in the gathering darkness, I could see
elongated shadows dancing on the pavement ahead. The wind
started to blow and leaves rustled in accompanying harmony
to the wind. Shivering, I walked faster. The road ahead
seemed deserted. The scenes from the horror show I had just
seen began to play on my mind.
"Arghh!" a sudden shout pierced through the stillness of the night.
Turning around, I tried to peer into the darkness. There was no
one there. Where had that scream come from?
Eg (2) - place (relating to hearing a scream)
- The old deserted house stood at the end of the street. Its windows
were boarded up. Paint was peeling off the wooden frames of the
door. My friends and I opened the gate and walked in.
As we did so, it seemed as though the eerie silence of the house
had hemmed us in. We no longer heard the cries of the birds or the
traffic sounds from the main road. Looking at my friends'
faces, I knew they would laugh at me if I backed out.
Walking slowly, we began to venture in deeper. Tall grass
scratched our legs. The garden was overrun by weeds.
Creak..creak..the floorboards creaked underneath our
feet as we walked onto the porch. An old rocking chair
sat, forlorn and forgotten, in one corner of the porch.
Long strands of grey cobweb dangled from it. I tried not to
look at the chair, fearing that it would start to move.
"Are you afraid?" Lynn looked at me, a sneer on her face.
Shaking my head, I followed the rest as they opened the
main door. Dust notes floated in the air as we
stepped into the house. Furniture that must have once
looked grand still stood proudly in their place.
A grand piano, its wood eaten away at places, was
placed right in the middle of the room.
"Heelllp!" a soft cry seemed to come from upstairs.
Petrified, I clutched Lynn's hand.
Here, when you use descriptions of a place or weather to start
a composition, they introduce the reader to the world
of the writer- the writer struggling in the heat, the writer
entering a deserted house etc. It gives context and sets the
'atmosphere' in the story.
Point to note:
Some children memorize descriptions of weather and put it
into their compositions which is fine but there must be a link
to the story. Sometimes their weather descriptions have no
link to the story.
- The sun rose majestically in the blue sky. Ducks from a
nearby pond quacked comically. The trees swayed gently
in the wind.
Ring! The bell rang for recess and I could finally get my food.
There is no reason to put in the description of the weather here
and the child will not get marks for the vocabulary used.
Hence, it is good to let your child know that the descriptions must
be tied into the story.